This video is the 10th rough cut for Why Georgia's music video. Again I have experimented with a Dry heat effect and more shot reverse shot for the bedroom performing scenes. I have include more variation of the bar performance shots including the audience. Also there is intertextuality with the music video by Jamie Scott unbreakable beacause of the diagetic introduction. Furthermore, I have brought back the effect of the projector in the bar shots and replaced the raser effect as the projector effect signifies a home ambiance.
Some good bits from PG’s cut to look at and see if you’ve included (or similar) in new cut:
ReplyDelete041 acoustic strum CU
053 specific on JM in record shop
127 think DB has that shot, but not from where this starts (which is nicely framed)? [indeed: 023 in DBs]
132 layering
152 cut to that movement is a good match to track’s uplift
201/203 good selection + transition
303 this simply highlights the candles mise-en-scene work well
330-335 3 shots worth having + 343
401 DB avoided matching this to distinguish his cut [used at end: 417] – you could use both (DB used a sad looking JM) with layering
DB cut
118 wobble
121- could crosscut bedroom/busk to match building pace?
128 this works, but could also be more impact – frame is ideal for layering
139 focus shift
142 big wobble at start of transition – if its candle layer start it with freeze frame!
148 shots like this v v important to link to digipak concept. Also: is Dylan pic from his controversial 1st electric gig? That narrative (rebellious folkie) fits your concept well!!!
250 good shot BUT not synched
316/17 timing a little off with 2nd bit of transition/cross-fade
333 good pace built up then this long take – and boy looks at camera, something you want to cut
348-355 maybe keep that pace up longer
358 need to cut into this later in take, looks like repeated/jump cut. Then fade? Maybe doesn’t work (or maybe too swift)
406- you can disguise wobble by starting cross-fade earlier
411 filters make this very dark
422 far too soon to have faded to black – great choice though; remember you can use freeze frame for fades